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Some people believe that in order to be effective, political leaders must yield to public opinion and abandon principles for the sake of compromise. Others believe that the most essential quality of an effective leader is the ability to remain consistently committed to particular principles and objectives.
Some people believe that in order to be effective, political leaders must yield to public opinion and abandon principles for the sake of compromise. Others believe that the most essential quality of an effective leader is the ability to remain consistently committed to particular principles and objectives.

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Some political systems, such as China and Russia, consistently committed to particular principles and objectives, disregarding citizens' opinions and suggestions at large. In contrast, countries like America and England rely heavily on public opinion, which sometimes could bring them into chaos or imprudent long-term decisions.
In China, the government is barely willing to listen to public opinion, if not loathing it. When it comes to big decisions, this system might have some advantages; its decision-making process is way more efficient than most democratic systems. China can build a city or bridge a lot faster as long as the government has made such a decision because there would not be another party votes against the implementation of these policies. However, the flaws in such an effective system are obvious, too. The central government obtains absolute power. When the regime becomes corrupt and officials become venal, there is no other force to represent average citizens and stand up against the regime. Instead of being the server and the protector of ordinary people, it could become a hindrance to peace and freedom.
On the other hand, countries like the USA value average citizens' rights significantly. People can sue the government and win. Such freedom, however, introduces new problems. The recent riot in the White House shows the danger of uncontrollable protesters; A police officer even got killed, while the police force did not shoot. If the police had fired during the riot, the result would have been unthinkable. People could fire back, it could escalate into a gunfight. Furthermore, it would indicate the failure of an ideally free society, making other countries have more faith in the legitimacy of oppression.
That being said, governments that value the input of average citizens are still doing better than those that do not. In conclusion, I believe that political leaders should value public opinion more than their own principles as long as it is not a moral dilemma. After all, it is citizens who should have the right to choose their government, instead of being controlled by the government.
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