Could anyone check my journal entry?

I went to eat sushi with my family. It was the first time to eat sushi in Houston. It was so good and I was so happy. After that, we went to the park where we have been to yesterday. It was hot day, so my kids enjoyed playing in the water.

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@miyuki2 Initially, I thought this journal entry was very vivd. I see a subject is missing in the second sentence. Secondly, the use of “and” after the third sentences connects “I was so happy”–an entire sentence –after it. Though, when used correctly, “and” can combine two sentences into one. Furthermore, although appearing twice in this example, “so” can not and should not be used in repeating patterns such as this one. More over, to combine these two sentences into one idea, it would be better stated as, “The meal was so good that it made happy.” In the statement after this, you have to keep your verb tenses consistent. Following, “a(n)” must be used in front of countable nouns, reading “It was a hot..,” when including this rule.

I think your journal entry would be better written like this: I went to eat sushi in Houston with my family. I was so happy that it tasted well! Afterwards, we went to the park that we had been to yesterday. My kids enjoyed the water on the hot day.