Could you please help with my writing?💝💝
I’d like to make them sound as natural as possible!!
How would you say this?
You can totally rephrase the sentence if you want.

1.On my way home, when I went down the subway station stairs, there was a beggar sitting in the corner. He was wearing a black jacket with the hood on, kneeling underground, putting his head down. Normally I just ignore and walked past them quickly, because I’m kind of scared of them. But today a guy who walked from the opposite side of me, gave him some money. It made my heart warm up. Since it still winter, I feel sorry for the homeless person. I have no idea why he became a vagrant, but I hope that he can sleep some warm place.

(I mean he was wearing the hood on his jacket.
He is covering his head with the hood.
I don’t know how to say this in English😭)

2.This morning at work, I read today’s top 10 stories in the Korean times in English. It was super cool, because I was able to read some popular news while studying English.

Question

Could you please help with my writing?💝💝
I’d like to make them sound as natural as possible!!
How would you say this? 
You can totally rephrase the sentence if you want.

1.On my way home, when I went down the subway station stairs, there was a beggar sitting in the corner. He was wearing a black jacket with the hood on, kneeling underground, putting his head down. Normally I just ignore and walked past them quickly, because I’m kind of scared of them. But today a guy who walked from the opposite side of me, gave him some money. It made my heart warm up. Since it still winter, I feel sorry for the homeless person. I have no idea why he became a vagrant, but I hope that he can sleep some warm place.

(I mean he was wearing the hood on his jacket.
He is covering his head with the hood.
I don’t know how to say this in English😭)

2.This morning at work, I read today’s top 10 stories in the Korean times in English. It was super cool, because I was able to read some popular news while studying English.

sydneyebrice · Accepted Answer

@Alice1009 Try this: On my way home when I went down into the subway, there was a beggar sitting in a corner. He was wearing a black jacket with its hood up and kneeling head-down on the ground. Normally I just ignore beggars and walk quickly past them because they scare me. But today a man, coming in the opposite direction, gave him some money. It/that warmed my heart. Because it was still winter, I felt sorry for the homeless man. I had no idea why he had become a vagrant, but I hoped that he would be able to sleep somewhere warm.
When you are telling a story, it is usually told in the past tense. So try and maintain the past tense and do not unnecessarily switch to the present tense.

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