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Please correct my introduction 4
I like taking part in volunteer activities too.
I've joined various volunteer work such as cleaning activities, helping with festivals and raising contributions on the street since I was an elementary school student.
My most unforgettable volunteer activity is helping with work of a kindergarten.
When I was a high school student, I regularly visited an American kindergarten in my town and worked there as a volunteer.
In the kindergarten, the main language is English so I practiced English conversion, while having fun.
Please correct my introduction 4
I like taking part in volunteer activities too.
I've joined various volunteer work such as cleaning activities, helping with festivals and raising contributions on the street since I was an elementary school student.
My most unforgettable volunteer activity is helping with work of a kindergarten.
When I was a high school student, I regularly visited an American kindergarten in my town and worked there as a volunteer.
In the kindergarten, the main language is English so I practiced English conversion, while having fun.
I like taking part in volunteer activities too.
I've joined various volunteer work such as cleaning activities, helping with festivals and raising contributions on the street since I was an elementary school student.
My most unforgettable volunteer activity is helping with work of a kindergarten.
When I was a high school student, I regularly visited an American kindergarten in my town and worked there as a volunteer.
In the kindergarten, the main language is English so I practiced English conversion, while having fun.
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- Englisch (US)
I like taking part in volunteer activities too. I've contributed in various volunteer work, such as cleaning activities, helping with festivals; and have been raising contributions on the street since I was an elementary school student.
My most unforgettable volunteer activity was helping with work at a kindergarten. When I was a high school student, I regularly visited an American kindergarten in my town and worked there as a volunteer. In the kindergarten, the main language was English, so I got to practice English conversations while having fun.
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"I like taking part in volunteer activities too."
You put "too" at the end here. If taking part in volunteer activities was mentioned before by someone else, this is okay. If not, you should get rid of the "too" :)
✗ I've joined various volunteer work such as...
◯ I've done various volunteer work such as...
✗ My most unforgettable volunteer activity is helping with work of a kindergarten.
◯ My most unforgettable volunteer activity was when I helped out in a kindergarten.
✗ In the kindergarten, the main language is English so I practiced English conversion, while having fun.
◯ In the kindergarten, the main language was English, so I was able to practice English conversation, while having fun at the same time.
I think these corrections will make it sound more natural :)
Good job!
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