could these two para. be improved ? I'd be very grateful if you could help me correct some grammatical errors if there are some.

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'contact with relatives or friends' -> 'contact relatives or friends'

'the age that the telephone didn't exist' -> 'the age where the telephone hadn't been invented'

'And it makes people keep a good relationship with others because they can talk to them more often.' -> 'Also, it helps people maintain a good relationship with others, as they can talk to them more often/frequently.'

'people could land spouse through Internet' -> 'people could meet their partner/spouse online'

'much more choice when choosing a partner' -> 'much more freedom in choosing a partner' OR 'many more options when choosing a partner'

'makes it possible for people finding a job' -> 'makes it possible (for people) to find a job'

'it could accelerate the mobility of the population therefore benefits the social economy' -> 'it has has the potential to enhance the mobility of the population, in turn benefitting the social economy'

Very well written! Also I love your handwriting. :)