In the Metropolitan area many young women spend a lot of time commuting. While they are young their salaries are low so they cannot live in Tokyo instead, they live the area around Tokyo. As a result they need to get up and leave home early in the morning. So they cannot have enough time to make up at home. Do you really think those women are guilty? If people bother someone, say by speaking loudly, they may be guilty. But those women are not annoying others. Rather I think these women are loyal people because they put on makeup on the train out of a sense of duty that they need to be ready to meet colleagues in their best conditions.

klingt das natürlich?

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In the Metropolitan area many young women spend a lot of time commuting. While they are young their salaries are low so they cannot live in Tokyo instead, they live the area around Tokyo. As a result they need to get up and leave home early in the morning. So they cannot have enough time to make up at home. Do you really think those women are guilty? If people bother someone, say by speaking loudly, they may be guilty. But those women are not annoying others. Rather I think these women are loyal people because they put on makeup on the train out of a sense of duty that they need to be ready to meet colleagues in their best conditions.


 klingt das natürlich?

LosAngeles007 · Answer

The first few sentences are good. Here are some suggestions for the later sentences:
"So they [do not] have enough time to [do their] make up at home. Do you really think those women are guilty [of annoying people by putting on their makeup on the train]? If people bother someone, say by speaking loudly, they may be guilty. But those women are not annoying others. Rather I think these women are [conscientious] people because they put on makeup on the train out of a sense of duty [to meet colleagues at their best.]"